Mayas Dear diary

WALHT: to use our senses to show rather than tell.

Learning Progression: Structure and Language. Use Visual features to engage the audience and convey meaning.

BK: Here is a picture called ‘Into the Jaws of Death.’ Taken by Robert F. Sargent June 6, 1944

Read this description of the image

MM: Complete a Y chart on a mini whiteboard first about what you would have seen, heard, and felt jumping out of the boat on the dawn of June 6 1944.

AU: Pretend you are one of these soldiers and write a diary account of the day you went to war.

You will attend a workshop on Monday to help you with this task.

Dear Diary

I jumped into the water  I could feel the water getting colder and colder every minute.I felt my heart going faster and faster as I begin to feel frightened.Then out of nowhere boom boom my fellow soldier was sinking into the deep blue ocean he had been shot.I could feel tears falling down my cheeks and i knew i had to be very quiet as we were getting closer then boom before I knew it we were at war i was shooting so much that my hand started to feel numb.I slowly started to walk back up onto land and hit one of the soldiers dead.I got shot back the pain was like a shark crunching the boat to pieces.Then I ran into the ocean as fast as a cheetah would run away from its enemy and went down into the water to retrieve my friend and he slowly woke up he was alive and when I knew it I was dead boom boom.   

Mayas war heros

Pativai's Animals's at war - Mascots

This is my animal's at war poster. The part I love about this poster is that the information that, can give the reader a bit of information about that specie. I put in there name and a little description, of them in the box for the information for the animal's. There were heap's of different kinds of animal's that went to world war one, there were horses dogs and even donkey's.

Time of war!

My Anzac recount

This is a recount as if I was at the war at Gallipoli. This is my 2nd task to do for our Anzac activities. I think I could have improved more on showing and not telling, because it was really hard to do that. One sentence where I 'showed' really well was where I wrote, "I felt like I was trapped in a pitch black room," because instead of saying I felt really scared and angry, then that would be telling. I also did well at describing the scene at the beginning.

25.04.1915 

Time of war!

The time has finally come. Me and the other troops were going to a battle at Gallipoli I have been writing in this diary on the boat about what each day felt away from home.Suddenly I felt scared, because we were there at Gallipoli, but still a bit far away that's, because we had to walk there. The real danger has come. I smelt the sea water as I jumped out, the water was up to my thigh. I could hear the bullets as it flew past, I couldn’t hear that well afterwards. Finally, we reached our destination, Suddenly, I felt like I was trapped in a pitch black room. I could see the Humongous  cliff with our enemies on top. I ran as fast as I could to get cover, and then I found a little wooden boat. Suddenly someone told me to come with them, so I went then I found this long trench, so I ran and jumped and landed nicely I also saw some of my mates. A streak of light went passed me. I realized that was a bullet so I quickly went a little bit deeper into the trench. I saw a lot of people that passed away at the no-man's-land. The gunshot sounds were starting to fade away. I heard my tummy rumbling. The smoke smelt strong. The ringing in my ears was deafening, so they had to scream so I could hear. It was begging to get dark and I felt tired, so I made a bed then I slept. This was my first day of war!